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Four brothers, exhibiting various trinalities <sp?>, discover, explore, and aid a fantastic world filled with fantastic people.
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Design principle: The fantastic setting highlights the similarities between TwinWorld and the one familiar to the audience.
  
=="Anatomy of Story" approach==
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==Plot Lines==
''The Anatomy of Story''  is a book I read about how to write stories. There are ordered steps, which I will attempt to go through. These answers are by no means authoritative. Feel free to change them. He says that, if you don't like the story at this point, throw it out and start over.
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===Main Plot: [[Oswald]]===
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Premise: The youngest of four brothers overcomes his apathy and kills a dragon that has overcome his siblings.
  
===Premise and Design Principle===
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Oswald is lazy, content to drift through life on talent. After his brothers discover an alternate universe, he tags along on a few adventures. When one of them is killed, he is moved to action. Some sinister force is bent not only on destroying his family, but controlling all of Twin World. He eventually tires of the intrigue and returns to Hozz, living a life of ease. Years later, [[Merril]] arrives with news that his other two brothers have also recently died. By piecing together the events that lead up to his brother's demise, and with the aid of their surviving friends, he manages to track down the source of the calamity. A [[Dragon]] sleeps beneath the [[Great Tree]], his plots entwined in every facet of Twin World. Gathering his courage, resources, and allies, Oswald ventures deep into the mind bending depths of the dragon's stronghold. But when he finally penetrates the dragon's lair, the dragon makes him an offer; A life of ease studying the priceless history and powers of the hoard, in exchange for Oswald's friendship. The dragon makes a bid to seduce Oswald with his old vices, and abandon the pointless journey of revenge. Oswald accepts, and lives for many years in the dragon's hoard. Yet, slowly, he uncovers further evidence that the dragon was behind not only his own brother's deaths, but the continual warfare between the [[Zarth]] and the [[Fayrie]] and many other atrocities. Mourning his lost opportunities, and wasted years, Oswald (now an old man) takes up the [[Dragon Lance]] and kills the dragon, now his only friend. The dragon's death throes draw the [[Turmoil]] in from the edges of the world, and Oswald dies in the wreck of the hoard as the [[Great Tree]] comes crashing down upon them all.
  
It directs that every good story should start with a premise and a design principle. The premise is what the story is about. The design principle is the process and execution of the story.
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===Side Plot: [[Ziggy]]===
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Premise: The oldest of four brothers overcomes his pride and submits to a world that he does not understand.
  
The premise should, in his words, "Be able to change your life." It should be something that is important enough to spend time writing a story about it.
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Ziggy thinks he knows everything about what is best for everyone. Although Oswald discovers TwinWorld, it is Ziggy that makes the first forray. He hears the prophecy and drags his other brothers into TwinWorld. Mis-interpereting the prophecy, he leads the group first to Propitiation, where they participate in planting the new [[Great Tree]]. The inhabitants tell them that the old Great Tree must be linked to the new one, and then die, for the new Great Tree to flourish. Ziggy declares that "The HOZZ brothers are prophesied to accomplish the task!" and leads the group, with much pomp, on a journey to the Great Tree. However, when they reach it he is confronted by the full force of the [[Fay]] [[Enchantment]] and is effortlessly ensorceled by the [[Fay Queen]]. Intrigued, the Queen gives him a choice, either admit that his mission was foolish and misguided and go free, or maintain his purpose trapped under her influence. Ziggy refuses to give in. Realizing that he knows nothing of either enchantment, or the politics that dominate the Great Tree, he accosts various Nobles attempting to find aid. Soon he is viewed as no more than a jester in the court. His brothers depart, Hugh to Propitiation, and Oswald with Zack to the House. Ziggy remains, unable to leave the Fay Court. He attempts every ruse and strategy he can muster, either to regain control, or to escape, but all to no effect. Surrendering for a time, he works to comprehend the Fay magic, and slowly bends the Queen's enchantments to siphons many of the linking spells back to the new Great Tree in Propitiation. He also learns of shaping from a group of Dryads (whose groves have been destroyed by the Dragon's schemes), and creates a massive [[Livewood]] Hilt from a branch of the Great Tree (Unknowingly offering grave offense to the Fay). Finally, he sees how the Queen was right all along, that his leadership was doomed to fail from the first step. He admits as much to the Queen before the whole court, and the enchantment is broken. Before leaving, however, Ziggy repeats the prophecy he heard on entering TwinWorld, much to the chagrin of the court. The Dragon stirs up the disgust of the Fay against him (for reviving interest in the Prophecy, calling for the fall of the Great Tree, and altering the old enchantments). Ziggy begins the journey back to the House, where he plans to begin again in humility as he should have. As he nears the edge of the Enchanted Forest, he is ambushed by a mob of Fay spurred by his Great Tree livewood artifact, the Nobles ire, and the Dragon's malice. They toy with him as he apologizes for whatever he might have done to upset them. The Fay, beside reason, kill him and disperse. [[Meril]] is among his murderers, and takes his journal. The Livewood Hilt he made is left to burst, and his body is quickly claimed by the forest.
  
'''Premise: The youngest of four brothers kills a dragon.'''
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===Side Plot: [[Hugh]]===
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Premise: A man struggles to properly express real love in the presence of real evil.
  
'''Design principle: A surprising alien and mildly metaphorical setting.'''
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Kills evil without remorse. After Ziggy is captured by the Fay he goes to Propitiation and helps them drive off the evil creatures that seem drawn to the place. Finds [[Meril]] an evil fay, but refrains from killing her, imprisoning her instead to study. Justifies his actions by seeking out the "ultimate corrupting influence". Stops Zack's army from reaching the Heart of Water, and kills Zack. Wracked by grief, he goes to live on the [[Horizon]]. While there, he forges the blade of the [[Dragon Lance]] with a Zarth (who was given his tools and station by the Dragon in order to discredit another Zarth). When he travels back to the House, Hugh gives the blade to [[Meril]]. Learns of the Dragon Cultists and decides they must be evil. Goes to wipe them out, and is stunned when his evil powers are only very mildly activated in the cultists presence. The cultists defend themselves, and Hugh is gravely injured. The cultists leave him in a cage made from the roots of the [[Great Tree]] with a pair of dragon wyrmlings. The wyrmlings burrow into his guts, but their evil keeps him alive. He escapes by linking his life with the roots of the world tree, and wanders the [[Turmoil]] in a delirium. After what seems like ages in his time-dialated agony Zack comes to him, dominates and removes the dragons, and heals him (though Hugh does not recognize him). After resting at [[Cloud 8]], he returns to the House of HOZZ. There is a letter waiting for him, calling him to testify in [[Merril]]s case in a Zarth court. Hugh travels to [[Anglestruct]] where he challenges the judge to combat for the case. Without his powers, it is a close fight, but he emerges victorious. He takes [[Merril]] back to the house of Hozz and lives happily there several years. While he is away, the Dragon incites the Zarth against him (in order to restore the former judge to power, as he was a key player in the Dragon's schemes). He is held trial for using his supernatural powers to corrupt justice. Unable to justify his past actions even to himself, he pleads guilty, and is executed. As he dies, the life link he established with the Great Tree shatters the roots, causing the Great Tree to shudder and list dangerously to the side.
  
===Story Core===
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===Side Plot: [[Zack]]===
He also says that the best, most interesting character is the hero. I think this is, as we have previously determined, Oswald. The other brothers all have a rather static "deal" or "style" that they stick to. Ziggy is creative and organized. Hugh hunts evil. Zack is a "cool dude" who commands the undead. But Oswald, he's a little of everything, and doesn't really know who he is at the beginning.
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Premise: A man gains power over others, but surrenders it for the beauty of freedom. See [[Litch]] for more details on his rise and fall.
  
'''Hero: [[Oswald]]'''
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Zack gains powers to control and re-animate others. His experiments grow more foul, and when he reaches Twin World he begins raising an army. He rules the [[Garden of Life]], but his brothers become suspicious of his activities. When Ziggy is killed, Zack travels to the spot of the murder, hoping to reanimate the corpse. He is disappointed to find only the "burst" Livewood hilt remaining. He takes the sprouted hilt with him, as it reminds him of the Lindora he has been working on controlling. He succeeds in partially re-animating the livewood, and carries it with him as a sprouted staff. Soon, his army is complete. When he attempts to corrupt the Heart of Water, his intentions and true nature are made clear. Hugh hunts down his philactery, and then kills Zack and tosses his body into the Heart of Water. There Zack Meets [[Tanodia]] and is reborn as a healer. He helps to heal the victims of the army he led to conquer the Heart of Water, and in doing so befriends many from Propitiation. Traveling to Propitiation, he heals many others and hears of the terrors that they have suffered. He lives for a while in Propitiation, healing the wounded from their battles. [[Merril]] finds him there. Convinced (by the Dragon's circuitous dreams) that he is still evil, she stabs him through the heart with the [[Dragon Lance|Dragon Blade]], which Zack partially blocks with the undead hilt-staff. The healing water from Zack's heart fuses the blade and hilt, and gives the weapon a life of its own. When he hears from Merril that Hugh has been wounded, he sets off into the Turmoil along with a few crafty Zarth. After many hardships, they locate Hugh. Zack heals him and leaves him with the Zarth at [[Cloud 8]]. He goes on many other adventures, making new companions among the Fay and Zarth. Eventually he hears that Propitiation is being attacked, and returns to help. Unfortunately, as he arrives Propitiation is being overrun by the Zarth/Fay coalition (a friendship spurred by the Dragon's schemes to keep the Old Tree safe). Zack dies as he roams through the battlefield, healing anyone he can. The healing heart that Tanodia gave him beats on, and becomes a healing spring until it is carried off the Horizon and out of memory.
  
Next is the conflict: "Who fights whom over what?"
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===Side Plot: [[The Dragon]]===
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Premise: A shrewd lover of beauty accumulates great wealth, only to have it destroyed when his schemes catch up to him.
  
'''Conflict: Oswald fights [[the Dragon]] over the fate of the [[Great Tree]]'''
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The Dragon wants treasure. Over the ages, he has accumulated a huge horde in the roots of the Great Tree.  In order to enjoy his treasure in peace, he must make sure he is not discovered, and especially not hunted.  To this end he kills all of the other dragons that he can find, and has convinced most of the world that dragons do not exist.  He encourages a small (but corrupt) group of Fay and Zarth to hunt any dragons that come up from the Pit, and has connections with the several dragon cults that spring up to worship dragons.  The dragon cults seek out and protect any dragons that make it out of the depths, and then send them to The Dragon, presumably to "rule at his side".  With these factions fighting each other, and neither aware of his location, he remains safe from the vast majority of creatures.  He has heard of the last prophesy, but figures that even if the Great Tree falls, the roots (and his hoard) will remain. He is so practiced at manipulating events that he does it literally in his sleep, his enchanted dreams disturbing and directing whole nations. As Ziggy, Hugh, and Zack interfere with his plans he has them destroyed from afar without a thought. Their youngest brother, Oswald, nearly surprises him in his lair, but the Dragon sees Oswald as just another novelty to add to his collection, and exploits his desire for ease and knowledge to assure his friendship. He continues for many years manipulating and guiding events in an attempt to keep the Old Tree from sliding off of the world. It is with genuine surprise that he finds himself confronted, years later, by a livid Oswald who demands that he move his lair to a new location so that the Old Tree can travel to the Horizon as it should. Unable to give up his home and treasures, The Dragon refuses. Guessing that Oswald intends to unveil him to the world, the Dragon gathers all of his huge hoard into the central chamber, intent on protecting it. Instead, Oswald attacks him suddenly, inflicting many fatal wounds. With his last energy, The Dragon destroys his stronghold intent that, if he may not forever enjoy the beauty he has gathered, then neither may anyone else.
  
Now we need to sum up a single cause-effect pathway that will take us through the conflict. Sub-plots and other interesting things can work in on the sides, but this is the central logic of the story. This is the plan.
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===Side Plot: [[Merril]]===
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A badly injured woman finds healing through the love, sacrifice, peace, and knowledge of others.
  
'''Central Cause-effect Path: The dragon is trying to save Great Tree to preserve his hoard. Oswald is trying to destroy Great Tree for Propitiation.'''
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Hugh's love, Zack's sacrifice, Oswald's peace, and Ziggy's knowledge.
  
Here's how I think it could go down:
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Merril has had a hard life. After her mother died slowly from a wasting fungus, she was set adrift by her distant father. Forced to make her own way she worked her way into the employ of [[Mogan]] where she was very ill used. After escaping his clutches she turned to the Fay community, but was spurned for her scars and her past. Driven further and further from Fay society, she sought refuge among the Zarth. They accept her, but are stiff and uncomfortable in her presence, distant like her father. On top of this, their ubiquitous metallic technology is poisonous to her Fay life energy. Finally accepting that she may be forever alone and miserable, she embraces her otherness. Shunning the normal and acceptable, she becomes more and more esoteric and perverse. Traveling back to the surface, she passes through cursed territory close to The Dragon's lair. His dreams become lodged in her being, and effused with his purpose she stirs up a mob of Fay to murder Ziggy. She takes his journal, and begins a tormented debate with the document, writing in the margins. From the journals pages she discovers several secret arts, and she ends up on the outskirts of Propitiation, the harried local fortune teller practicing vampyrism on her customers.
* The Dragon incites the war between [[Propitiation]] and [[Few]] which drives away [[Durand]].
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* Oswald is failing school, and instead of doing his homework, helps out around the house.
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* The brothers return briefly to TwinWorld, but are driven off by the Few.
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* The Dragon arranges for Zack to gain his necromancy, in order to influence him. Oswald finds out, but does nothing (weakness).
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* The necromancy gets the brothers kicked out of their house.
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* Oswald fights the Few off from his ancestral home (first big choice), and they live there.
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* The Few retaliate, and imprison Hugh within the roots of the Great Tree.
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* Oswald teams up with Propitiation, and learns about the struggle over the world tree.
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* The Dragon arranges for Ziggy to be bound to the old Great Tree to dissuade Oswald from fighting.
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* Propitiation captures Ziggy, tells them to use his power to grow the new world tree (second big choice) which kills Ziggy.
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* Ziggy's death enables Hugh to break free using his (now unbalanced) destruction powers.
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* Oswald and Zack lead a necromatic army to assault Great Tree.
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* The dragon repells them in open combat, and (subtly) turns Zack's powers on the [[Heart of Water]] to poison the new Great Tree.
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* Oswald and Hugh kill Zack (third big choice). Hugh looses his powers.
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* Oswald takes Hugh's sword, and goes to slay the dragon.
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* The Dragon rises in fury from his lair and confronts Oswald. He kills the dragon.
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* Oswald sees that he can preserve Great Tree, or destroy it (final big choice). He decides to do away with the old order, and cuts down Great Tree.
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* The new Great Tree grows back in place of the old one. Many of the Few settle in it, their struggle with Propitiation forgotten.
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* Oswald returns to school on Earth, but does his homework this time.
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Looking back over this plot line it could certainly be improved. Still, a good start. There are a number of complications which are not necessary, and some stuff that could be added as side-plots. Those go somewhere else.
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Her evil draws Hugh, and he dares her to give him one good reason to stay his hand. Beyond caring, she pours out her life story, but on hearing it Hugh judges her "harmless and too miserable to kill" and leaves her alive, bound to the House of HOZZ, as worse punishment than death. She attempts to torment Oswald, but is thwarted by his tranquility. Later Hugh returns, wracked by grief and a strange new affection. He gives her the [[Adamant]] blade that he has forged as a peace offering, and pledges to attempt her redemption. She draws power from him through her vampyric arts, but her evil fuels his powers and he becomes stronger than ever. Cultists of the Dragon visit one day and Merril plans to kill them for the magic artifacts they posess. Hugh (mistaking Merril's evil for that of the cultists) drives them off and then frees her of the house before leaving to hunt them down. Merril is frustrated that her plan was foiled, yet also impressed by Hugh's loyalty. She resumes her study of Ziggy's journal and returns to her old haunts outside of Propitiation, asking her clients for news of the HOZZ brothers. In this manner she learns not only of Hugh's defeat and apparent death in the Turmoil, but of Zack's return from the dead. Driven by her budding love for Hugh, she takes the blade he gave her and confronts his old foe. She is stunned when Zack not only refuses to retaliate, but immediately begins preperations to find Hugh, and help him if he can. Just before he leaves, Zack uses his healing gift to restore Merril, washing away both the Dragon's subtle hold on her, and her deformity (though the scars remain faintly visible).
  
===Character Change===
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She waits in Propitiation, working as a spell weaver, until the first of the attacks are rumored. Fleeing the conflict, she travels to her old friends in Zarthaanc but is arrested on sight for a variety of crimes. When asked to name a witness in her defense, she gives them Hugh's name, and the location of his "home" at the house of HOZZ. While awaiting trial she meets several other Fay, and is able to help them cope with their incarceration. To her surprise, Hugh arrives some time later and frees her through trial by combat. They return together to the House of HOZZ and spend several happy years together. Then Hugh is once again summoned to stand before the Zarth court. Fearing that they will harm Merril, he asks her to stay at the House.
The hero needs to change and grow as a character. He needs a weakness, some action that addresses the weakness, and a resultant change.
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'''Character Change: Oswald is apathetic and doesn't think his actions make a difference (weakness). By responding to the Dragon and his atrocities (action), he finds that he can affect the world around him. As a result, he becomes decisive and active (change).'''
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After Hugh leaves, Merril grows restless and sets out for the Great Tree. Her demeanor is so changed that no one recognizes her, and they take her for a newly formed Fay, come from the wilds of the Horizon. She takes up residence in the Great Tree and weaves several powerful charms, as well as strengthening those that Ziggy laid (which she learned about from his journal). When the war-band returns from conquering Propitiation it brings news of Zack's death. At the same time, some of the Zarth in the group mention that Zack's brother, Hugh, was also recently executed. Distraught and fearing for Oswald's life, Merril travels back to the House of Hozz and informs him of the recent events. Oswald comforts her and together they set out to uncover the true nature of The Dragon.
  
There also needs to be a real moral choice. I think the choice should have to do with the decision to do something painful to end a bad circumstance and bring a better future. This ties in with Oswald's weakness (apathy) as it is easier for him to endure an uncomfortable situation. Oswald has several of these choices. I think we should try hard to make them meaningful. A crescendo in impact would be good as well.
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When they reach Propitiation, Merril tells Oswald of the [[Dragon Lance]] which has been posing as a sculpture along one of the roads. Oswald takes it with him, but Merril decides to stay in Propitiation. She has learned to be at peace. She weaves spells and gives good advice, while circumspectly maintaining the enchanted link between the new and the old Great Tree. Many years later, she is gratified to see the new Great Tree burst into maturity when the old one collapses into the ruin of The Dragon's hoard. Her aid in the founding of Propitiation is recognized and she becomes one of the ad-hoc Royal Fay of the new Great Tree.
  
'''Moral Choice(s): Fight off the Few from his ancestral home (or do nothing)? Sacrifice Ziggy's powers for the good of Propitiation and the new Great Tree (or do nothing)? Kill Zack? Kill the Dragon?'''
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===Side Plot: [[Durand|The Oracle]]===
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Long ago Tanodia communed with the world. He wrote a rune of truth upon the solidcloud, and the solidcloud took on the form of the Oracle. He wandered long over the surface, branded with the runes of the Maker. When he sat still, or stood, he watched the world, and ate and drank and laughed. But when he walked runes of prophecy would sprang up in his footsteps, portending far off events, subtle truths, and terrible secrets. In time, he learned speech, but is silent as he walks.
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For many years the Oracle wandered far, but many read his footsteps aslant, and twisted the prophecies to their own ends. As he saw the dire ill which came from these lies he took to resting for long periods. When he walked, he would walk backwards, reading his own steps and coming to rest again to explain the prophecies to those who would listen. Sadly, even the Oracle had no special power to divine the meaning of his steps. His interpretations were better than most, but far too often led others astray. The meaning of the prophetic runes remained clear only in hindsight.
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As the ages wore on, the Oracle's steps foretold the fall of each Great Tree as it sprung up. But as the most recent matured, the Nobles of the Tree decided that this would be the last, the final Great Tree, a refuge to endure for all time. They forbade the Oracle to walk, preventing him from issuing any new prophecies. Their servants carried him on a litter, and his every desire was met. Yet he grew ill at ease, and saw that the Great Tree could not endure forever. He too grew wary of his own death, and resolved to sire children before he passed over the Horizon, as is the fate of all living things.
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One day, while sitting on his litter in the Fay Court, [[Llieah]]'s three caretakers brought her to present to the Fay Queen. Smitten by her beauty, Durand forgot his prohibition and ran across the court to catch [[Llieah]] in his arms. His steps spelled out the Last Prophecy for all the Fay Court to see, graven in runes into the Great Tree itself. The Nobles are furious at his betrayal, and cut off his legs, breaking the enchantments which hold both Durand and Llieah. Llieah flies with durand far from the Great Tree, and make their home among the deadly [[Garden of Life]] where they live together for many years, during which Llieah bears three sons. Soon after the birth of the third, word gets back to the Nobles that the prophecy is close to being fulfilled. They hire the Zarth to kill Durand and Llieah. Durand wakes one morning to find the rune for "fly for your life" seared into the pillow beneath his head. He and Llieah work a potent spell to open a doorway to Llieah's home, and they step through just as the Zarth approach the house. (see [[Escape]])
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Finding themselves on Earth, alone with their three small children, Durand and Llieah start their life once again, settling on the outskirts of [[a city]]. Llieah bears one more son. Durand is disturbed to find that the doorway never quite closed behind them, and fearful of what may befall his sons. Yet they live in relative peace for many years.
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When his boys are full grown, they go rock climbing with their father. Even though he lacks legs, his arms are strong. However, when he reaches the top of the cliff, the HOZZ brothers are astounded to find strange runes engraved in the cliff face where their father had passed. They ask him what they mean, but he refuses to speculate, though these runes tell the four brothers to return to TwinWorld and fulfill their father's legacy. Years pass, and Durand sees his boys grow listless and lacking in direction. Finally Durand sees that he must either doom his children to a pointless existence, or direct them on the path that will lead to a meaningful life. Resigned to fate, Durand directs the boys subtly to the house where they first entered Earth, and where the magic of the doorway still resides.
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After his boys leave, he grieves with Llieah for a while, before asking her to return with him to see what has befallen. They arrive to see the Great Tree falling in the distance, fulfilling the Last Prophecy. Durand and Llieah live in the House of HOZZ until Llieah dies of old age. Then Durand too gives up his life and adds his Fay Dust to the power of the Garden of Life. The roots and stems and leaves of the garden take on the power of the oracle, and for an age those who brave its depths may find runes there which tell of marvelous things.
  
 
==The Prophecy==
 
==The Prophecy==
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"Four paths for four brothers, my sons. Twice spoken. Last to first, from doom to doom, oldest to youngest. In rest, in toil, in love, in confusion, the four paths lie. Together you shall come without will, and apart you shall go by choice and not return. One path runs through wood, one through fire, one through water, one through self. You shall slay your foulest friend. You shall heal your bitterest foe. You shall stand against evil and fall to good. You shall yield to truth and bear falsehood. Together your coming shall shake the Great Tree, and your going shall see it fall. Learn well. Choose well. Act well. Endure well."
The prophecy
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#'''Is it actually necessary?''' The prophecy is an interesting idea, but may not fit this story.
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#Does it need to be misinterpereted?
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#Can we convey this information in some other way?
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#What other prophecies have been made in the past, and how did they turn out?
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Here are some ideas of how the prophecy can be specific, but still open to mis-interpretation. We may consider making it very explicit instead, to draw out the silliness of the mis-interpretation.
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===Explanation===
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*'''Four paths for four brothers, my sons.''' The prophecy is given by [[Durand]] about his four sons, who (at the time of the prophecy) have not yet been born.
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*'''Twice said, Last to first, from doom to doom, oldest to youngest.''' This alternating phrase outlines the order (2x the pattern of: 4,1; interlude; 1,4) in which the prophecy is given. That is 4,3,2,1; (interlude about motivation "from doom"); 1,2,3,4; 4,3,2,1; (interlude about effect "to doom"); 1,2,3,4
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*'''In rest, in toil, in love, in confusion, the four paths lie.''' 4,3,2,1: Oswald is in rest, Zack in toil, Hugh in love, Ziggy in confusion.
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*'''Together you shall come without will, and apart you shall go by choice and not return. ''' (interlude about motivation "from doom"): They are diven to Twin World against their will, but as a group. They leave Twin World by their own choice, each choosing his own good death.
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*'''One path runs through wood, one through fire, one through water, one through self.''' 1,2,3,4: Ziggy's purpose deals with the Great Tree, Hugh's purpose deals with the Outer Fire, Zack's purpose deals with the Heart of Water, Oswald's purpose deals with his own motivations.
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*'''You shall slay your foulest friend. You shall heal your bitterest foe. You shall stand against evil and fall to good. You shall yield to truth and bear falsehood.''' 4,3,2,1: Oswald slays his foul friend (the Dragon), Zack heals his bitter foe (Hugh), Hugh defeats evil (that thing he does) but is killed by good (the Zarth who bring him to justice), Ziggy submits to truth (the prophecy, and the deep knowledge of Twin World) and bears the falsehood (the Dragon levies lies against him).
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*'''Together your coming shall shake the Great Tree, and your going shall see it fall.''' (interlude about effect "to doom"): The return of the children of Durand indeed shakes the social order of the Great Tree, and each of them sees the Great Tree fall in some way. Ziggy lays the linking magic which will siphon the life energy from the old Great Tree to the new one. Hugh severs the anchoring roots of the Great Tree, causing it to fall over. Zack sees Propitiation, the symbolic Great Tree, fall to the Zarth and Fay. Oswald sees the Great Tree literally fall into the Turmoil after he slays the dragon.
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*'''Learn well. Choose well. Act well. Endure well.''' 1,2,3,4: Ziggy is to learn. Hugh is to choose. Zack is to act. Oswald is to endure.
  
*Ziggy, "gather knowlege from the world(tree)" He needs to gather the knowlege from the Great Tree, but he thinks it means all of the nations.
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===Misinterpretation of the Prophecy===
*Hugh, "Give your sword to your brother" He should give it to Oswald, but he thinks it means "pledge fealty to my brothers in arms" or a fellow hero, or a king of some kind.
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Each of the Hozz brothers chooses what he likes best from the prophecy, instead of following his own part. Portrayed here in mono-log form.
*Zack, "You must become strong so you can help your brothers" means that he must pour his strength into the sword, but thinks that it means help your "fellow soldiers" and creates an army of golems to aid in the battle.
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*Ziggy: Huh, I like "Twice spoken" People say, "don't make me say it twice" but maybe that's a good thing. I'll say things twice when I want them to really get it. "One path" Huh? Yeah, we've all got to follow the same path. I say we stick together and go to each of these places one at a time. "wood" is first, so we should get to the Great Tree. Also "yield to truth and bear falsehood" makes sense, we shouldn't be afraid to lie when necessary, as long as we admit it afterwords. Also, "learn well" is the first thing, so we should all be trying to learn as much as we can before we choose anything. Gotta follow the prophecy!
*Oswald. "You must kill the rot at the core of the world." Oswald must slay the dragon. He thinks that he must instead kill Zack. The continued attempts could be played for laughs?
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*Hugh: "Together you shall come without will" means that having a weak will is bad. We have to "stand against evil" like it says, and not be intimidated or confused. It even says "in confusion" but that's got to mean we should watch out for confusion. "Through self" means we can't rely on others, we're in this alone. And hey, Merril is probably my "foulest friend", I've jut got to befriend her enough and then, wham! Slaying evil baby!
 
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*Zack: This is an awesome prophecy, "doom to doom" and "shake the Great Tree"? Totally sweet! "slay your foulest friend" sounds like a trator though, so we've got to watch out for that. It would be easy to get betrayed with all these crazy creatures around. They might not be as friendly as they seem, and like it says we've got to "Choose well" who our friends are.
==Alternate prophecy==
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*Oswald: Wow, this is a confusing prophecy. I really like how he said "my sons", I've always felt kind of distant from Dad. "Last to first... oldest to youngest" what does that mean? There's "fire... water" in there, maybe it has to do with the four elements? "heal your bitterest foe" sounds good, we should try to reconcile with our enemies instead of hurt them. I like how it says "in love" too. I don't think we should worry too much about it though, if it's a prophecy, it will come true no matter what we do.
What if only Hugh has a prophecy he is doomed to fulfill? That of killing Zack. When he does, his powers of hunting evil are relieved. Just a thought [[User:Ziggy|Ziggy]] 19:28, 21 April 2011 (UTC)
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==Sets of contrasting points and symbols==
 
==Sets of contrasting points and symbols==
 
===The main plot arc involves four major groups===
 
===The main plot arc involves four major groups===
#The [[:Category:HOZZ_brothers|Hozz Brothers]] are a group everyman. They spend most of their time working against their ultimate goals, through incompetence, misinformation, or laziness.
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#The [[:Category:HOZZ_brothers|Hozz Brothers]] are a group everyman. They spend most of their time working against their ultimate goals through pride, malice, misinformation, or laziness.
 
#[[The Fayrie]] are a woman symbol society.
 
#[[The Fayrie]] are a woman symbol society.
 
#[[The Zarth]] are a male symbol society.
 
#[[The Zarth]] are a male symbol society.
 
#[[The Dragon]] is a symbol of competent evil. He is playing both sides of pretty much everything and keeps coming out on top.
 
#[[The Dragon]] is a symbol of competent evil. He is playing both sides of pretty much everything and keeps coming out on top.
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#[[Durand|The Oracle]] is a symbol of uncomfortable truths that keep coming back until you deal with them.
  
 
===The long-term history has three sections===
 
===The long-term history has three sections===
#The Dragon amasses treasure under the Great Tree, and gets most of the world to think that dragons don't exist, while the rest of the world is terrified of dragons, and tries to kill all the other ones.
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#The Dragon amasses treasure under the Great Tree, and gets most of the world to think that dragons don't exist, while the rest of the world is terrified of dragons, and tries to kill all the other ones (see [[TwinWorld_origin#The_Coming_of_Dragons|this story]]).
#The Oracle is established as accurate and reliable, and then prophesies that his offspring will fell/destroy the Great Tree.  He is forced to flee as many decide to try and kill him and his family before this prophesy can come true.
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#[[Durand|The Oracle]] is established as accurate and reliable, and then prophesies that his offspring will fell/destroy the Great Tree.  He is forced to flee as many decide to try and kill him and his family before this prophesy can come true.
 
#The Hozz brothers fulfill the prophesy, but only after misinterpreting it and failing several times.
 
#The Hozz brothers fulfill the prophesy, but only after misinterpreting it and failing several times.
  
===The main plot arc involves Three major locations===
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==To Do==
#[[The House]]: The namesake of the comic. A house built by Durand. It provides a portal to Earth. Hiddin within the [[Garden of life]]
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===Add a plot line for [[:Category:HOZZZ_brothers|Zabu]]===
#[[Great Tree]], shifting off to the side of the world, home to the old guard of Fay and the Dragon's horde ([[The Lair]]).
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We need to make a new [[:Category:HOZZZ_brothers|character]] to flesh out the personality space and align with the family reality.
#[[Propitiation]]: A kingdom founded by eclectic mix of refugee Fey and zarth explorers. The land was given as a peace offering to the settlers by the tribal fey who live in the surrounding area in atonement for an accidental war.  Propitiation is incidentally constructed atop the new Great Tree.
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The existing character arcs should be reworked with the personality trait mapping in mind.
Note that all of thee locations are fairly near both to each-other, the surface, and the axis of Twinworld.
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==Fleshing out the characters==
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===The Dragon===
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The Dragon wants treasure.  Over the ages, he has accumulated a huge horde in the roots of the Great Tree.  In order to enjoy his treasure in peace, he must make sure he is not discovered, and especially not hunted.  To this end he kills all of the other dragons that he can find, and has convinced most of the world that dragons do not exist.  He encourages a small (but corrupt) group of Fay to hunt any dragons that come up from the deeps, and has connections with the several dragon cults that spring up to worship dragons.  The dragon cults seek out and protect any dragons that make it out of the depths, and then send them to the Dragon, presumably to "rule at his side".  With these factions fighting each other, and neither aware of his location, he remains safe from the vast majority of creatures.  He has heard of the last prophesy, but figures that even if the Great Tree falls, the roots will remain.  He does not believe that humans exist.
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===The Oracle===
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The oracle wants people to believe the truth.  Unfortunately, he isn't sure what that is most of the time.  His predictions come un-bidden, and even he doesn't know what they portend.  When he make predictions, many take them the wrong way, or re-interperet and twist them to mean what they want.  After the Last Prophesy, most people think that the attention went to his head.  Some claim that he was manipulating events to go the way he predicted.  Others claim he is in fact the dragon, sowing seeds of delusion.  Some still believe his veracity, but since he disappeared (to earth) the hopes that his last prophesy will come true are slim.  He lives on earth, with his wife and children, and still makes prophecies occasionally.  They always come true.
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===The Hozz brothers===
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The older three brothers are the Body (Zack) Soul (Hugh) and Spirit (Ziggy) of Man, or mankind.  Oswald is the Christ figure, in that he is sent from the Father and lays down his life.
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The older three are naif and quick to act.  Shortly after arriving in Twin World, they each receive prophecies concerning how to do what is right.  Each one of them chooses to read into and translate the words into what makes sense to them at the time.  This happens throughout the story.  The plain meaning is just too unbelievable!  Through this convenient application of "interperetation", they end up on the wrong side of almost every conflict, and spend most of their time mucking things up.  At the end, and almost by accident, they fulfill their roles, and the prophecy.
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==Fleshing out the World==
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The [[TwinWorld_origin|origin and history of the world]], this may not be remembered the same by the Zarth and Fay.
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===several other locations===
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#[[The Deepening]], a city located at the lowest habitable region of the world. A major Zarth stronghold/citidel and center of dragon hunting operations.
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#[[Brimcloud]]: The capital of the [[Few]], a major Fey kingdom. It has strong ties to old Great Tree and is the main opponent of its destruction.
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#[[Anglestruct]]: the capital of one of the major zarth empires. The center of all clockwork and mechanomancy.
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#[[Blazen]]: A small but famous Zarth outpost. Home to the greatest smith and foundery in the world.
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#The dragon cultist stronghold/temple: built at the root of the old Great Tree. The prison for Hugh.
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#[[Cloud 8]]: A small Zarth trading outpost. Home to outcasts, oppertunists, and calling port for the Woe.
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#[[Corral Keep]]: The nearest boarder citadel of Brimcloud to Propotiation. The center of their military efforts.
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===Reception of the Prophecy===
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The Hozz brothers receive their prophecies that were made by the Oracle.  However, Oswald does not receive his prophecy
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Oracle needs to have made individual prophecies for the brothers before leaving TwinWorld.  Gives them to them, but has none for Oswald.  Tells them that when all of their prophecies are united, they will be fulfilled.  Three older brothers think that this means that Oswald isn't supposed to come, so they leave him behind.  Oswald serves as the storyteller/narrator for the adventures in TwinWorld for the main beginning and middle of the story.
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===The great defeat===
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At the sub-climax, everyone fails.  Hugh fails to defeat the dragon (tries by himself, wrong approach).  Ziggy fails to save the Great Tree (tries at the wrong time, wrong Great Tree).  Zack and Oswald fail to defeat the army of the "false center" (fighting on the wrong side, in the wrong battle).  Hugh ends up imprisoned by the Dragon on the far side of the world, Ziggy is shamed in front of the elders of the Great Tree, and Zack and Oswald find themselves left for dead on the battle field.
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===The Turning Point===
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After their defeat, the Brothers begin to re-think his prophecies, especially in light of his "Last Prophecy".  They start trying to fulfill the plain meaning of the prophecies they have recieved, but initially this results in catastrophy as they begin to undo their former work.  The old Great Tree is felled when Hugh destroys his prison, and Ziggy grows the new Great Tree.  In the process, much of Zarth is ruined (by the roots of the Old Great Tree tearing out, and the new roots sinking in).  The dragon's is also exposed, so he decides to go to plan two, kill everything.  Oswald must gain the trust of the Zarth and the New Centerieans in order to forge a dragon slaying weapon, but he mostly alienates their former allies.  Zack finally embraces his Golem creating powers as a tool of good, but looses control of his army, causing widespread terror.  Things are moving in the right direction, but looking worse than ever.
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===Hugh Kills Zack===
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But somehow Zack doesn't die all the way.  Not sure how this one is going to work exactly.  This is the culmination of Hugh hunting evil, and finding out that Zack is the cause of the zombie armies.  There needs to be some development of the "necromancy is evil" theme before this point, as well as explanation of Zack's powers.
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===Dragon is Crafty===
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*They think the dragon is trying to kill them, when he doesn't even believe they exist.
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*They hear that the dragon wants an artifact and go racing off to get it before the dragon does. Turns out the dragon already has one just like it, and wanted another one for his collection, so spread the rumor to see if anyone could find more of them.
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*They find out that the dragon needs a certain artifact, so they go and destroy the only existing copy (angering lots of people in the process). The dragon was planning on making his own anyhow.
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==Critique==
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Seriously though, I'm not sure what the story is about here. Hugh and Zack? Oswald and the Dragon? Ziggy? Twin World? Its inhabitants?
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Yes. The plot is still a mess. I must stress the that unless we progress this is less than a guess. :)  [[User:Ziggy|Ziggy]] 22:13, 28 January 2011 (UTC)
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Latest revision as of 19:12, 8 May 2023

Design principle: The fantastic setting highlights the similarities between TwinWorld and the one familiar to the audience.

Plot Lines

Main Plot: Oswald

Premise: The youngest of four brothers overcomes his apathy and kills a dragon that has overcome his siblings.

Oswald is lazy, content to drift through life on talent. After his brothers discover an alternate universe, he tags along on a few adventures. When one of them is killed, he is moved to action. Some sinister force is bent not only on destroying his family, but controlling all of Twin World. He eventually tires of the intrigue and returns to Hozz, living a life of ease. Years later, Merril arrives with news that his other two brothers have also recently died. By piecing together the events that lead up to his brother's demise, and with the aid of their surviving friends, he manages to track down the source of the calamity. A Dragon sleeps beneath the Great Tree, his plots entwined in every facet of Twin World. Gathering his courage, resources, and allies, Oswald ventures deep into the mind bending depths of the dragon's stronghold. But when he finally penetrates the dragon's lair, the dragon makes him an offer; A life of ease studying the priceless history and powers of the hoard, in exchange for Oswald's friendship. The dragon makes a bid to seduce Oswald with his old vices, and abandon the pointless journey of revenge. Oswald accepts, and lives for many years in the dragon's hoard. Yet, slowly, he uncovers further evidence that the dragon was behind not only his own brother's deaths, but the continual warfare between the Zarth and the Fayrie and many other atrocities. Mourning his lost opportunities, and wasted years, Oswald (now an old man) takes up the Dragon Lance and kills the dragon, now his only friend. The dragon's death throes draw the Turmoil in from the edges of the world, and Oswald dies in the wreck of the hoard as the Great Tree comes crashing down upon them all.

Side Plot: Ziggy

Premise: The oldest of four brothers overcomes his pride and submits to a world that he does not understand.

Ziggy thinks he knows everything about what is best for everyone. Although Oswald discovers TwinWorld, it is Ziggy that makes the first forray. He hears the prophecy and drags his other brothers into TwinWorld. Mis-interpereting the prophecy, he leads the group first to Propitiation, where they participate in planting the new Great Tree. The inhabitants tell them that the old Great Tree must be linked to the new one, and then die, for the new Great Tree to flourish. Ziggy declares that "The HOZZ brothers are prophesied to accomplish the task!" and leads the group, with much pomp, on a journey to the Great Tree. However, when they reach it he is confronted by the full force of the Fay Enchantment and is effortlessly ensorceled by the Fay Queen. Intrigued, the Queen gives him a choice, either admit that his mission was foolish and misguided and go free, or maintain his purpose trapped under her influence. Ziggy refuses to give in. Realizing that he knows nothing of either enchantment, or the politics that dominate the Great Tree, he accosts various Nobles attempting to find aid. Soon he is viewed as no more than a jester in the court. His brothers depart, Hugh to Propitiation, and Oswald with Zack to the House. Ziggy remains, unable to leave the Fay Court. He attempts every ruse and strategy he can muster, either to regain control, or to escape, but all to no effect. Surrendering for a time, he works to comprehend the Fay magic, and slowly bends the Queen's enchantments to siphons many of the linking spells back to the new Great Tree in Propitiation. He also learns of shaping from a group of Dryads (whose groves have been destroyed by the Dragon's schemes), and creates a massive Livewood Hilt from a branch of the Great Tree (Unknowingly offering grave offense to the Fay). Finally, he sees how the Queen was right all along, that his leadership was doomed to fail from the first step. He admits as much to the Queen before the whole court, and the enchantment is broken. Before leaving, however, Ziggy repeats the prophecy he heard on entering TwinWorld, much to the chagrin of the court. The Dragon stirs up the disgust of the Fay against him (for reviving interest in the Prophecy, calling for the fall of the Great Tree, and altering the old enchantments). Ziggy begins the journey back to the House, where he plans to begin again in humility as he should have. As he nears the edge of the Enchanted Forest, he is ambushed by a mob of Fay spurred by his Great Tree livewood artifact, the Nobles ire, and the Dragon's malice. They toy with him as he apologizes for whatever he might have done to upset them. The Fay, beside reason, kill him and disperse. Meril is among his murderers, and takes his journal. The Livewood Hilt he made is left to burst, and his body is quickly claimed by the forest.

Side Plot: Hugh

Premise: A man struggles to properly express real love in the presence of real evil.

Kills evil without remorse. After Ziggy is captured by the Fay he goes to Propitiation and helps them drive off the evil creatures that seem drawn to the place. Finds Meril an evil fay, but refrains from killing her, imprisoning her instead to study. Justifies his actions by seeking out the "ultimate corrupting influence". Stops Zack's army from reaching the Heart of Water, and kills Zack. Wracked by grief, he goes to live on the Horizon. While there, he forges the blade of the Dragon Lance with a Zarth (who was given his tools and station by the Dragon in order to discredit another Zarth). When he travels back to the House, Hugh gives the blade to Meril. Learns of the Dragon Cultists and decides they must be evil. Goes to wipe them out, and is stunned when his evil powers are only very mildly activated in the cultists presence. The cultists defend themselves, and Hugh is gravely injured. The cultists leave him in a cage made from the roots of the Great Tree with a pair of dragon wyrmlings. The wyrmlings burrow into his guts, but their evil keeps him alive. He escapes by linking his life with the roots of the world tree, and wanders the Turmoil in a delirium. After what seems like ages in his time-dialated agony Zack comes to him, dominates and removes the dragons, and heals him (though Hugh does not recognize him). After resting at Cloud 8, he returns to the House of HOZZ. There is a letter waiting for him, calling him to testify in Merrils case in a Zarth court. Hugh travels to Anglestruct where he challenges the judge to combat for the case. Without his powers, it is a close fight, but he emerges victorious. He takes Merril back to the house of Hozz and lives happily there several years. While he is away, the Dragon incites the Zarth against him (in order to restore the former judge to power, as he was a key player in the Dragon's schemes). He is held trial for using his supernatural powers to corrupt justice. Unable to justify his past actions even to himself, he pleads guilty, and is executed. As he dies, the life link he established with the Great Tree shatters the roots, causing the Great Tree to shudder and list dangerously to the side.

Side Plot: Zack

Premise: A man gains power over others, but surrenders it for the beauty of freedom. See Litch for more details on his rise and fall.

Zack gains powers to control and re-animate others. His experiments grow more foul, and when he reaches Twin World he begins raising an army. He rules the Garden of Life, but his brothers become suspicious of his activities. When Ziggy is killed, Zack travels to the spot of the murder, hoping to reanimate the corpse. He is disappointed to find only the "burst" Livewood hilt remaining. He takes the sprouted hilt with him, as it reminds him of the Lindora he has been working on controlling. He succeeds in partially re-animating the livewood, and carries it with him as a sprouted staff. Soon, his army is complete. When he attempts to corrupt the Heart of Water, his intentions and true nature are made clear. Hugh hunts down his philactery, and then kills Zack and tosses his body into the Heart of Water. There Zack Meets Tanodia and is reborn as a healer. He helps to heal the victims of the army he led to conquer the Heart of Water, and in doing so befriends many from Propitiation. Traveling to Propitiation, he heals many others and hears of the terrors that they have suffered. He lives for a while in Propitiation, healing the wounded from their battles. Merril finds him there. Convinced (by the Dragon's circuitous dreams) that he is still evil, she stabs him through the heart with the Dragon Blade, which Zack partially blocks with the undead hilt-staff. The healing water from Zack's heart fuses the blade and hilt, and gives the weapon a life of its own. When he hears from Merril that Hugh has been wounded, he sets off into the Turmoil along with a few crafty Zarth. After many hardships, they locate Hugh. Zack heals him and leaves him with the Zarth at Cloud 8. He goes on many other adventures, making new companions among the Fay and Zarth. Eventually he hears that Propitiation is being attacked, and returns to help. Unfortunately, as he arrives Propitiation is being overrun by the Zarth/Fay coalition (a friendship spurred by the Dragon's schemes to keep the Old Tree safe). Zack dies as he roams through the battlefield, healing anyone he can. The healing heart that Tanodia gave him beats on, and becomes a healing spring until it is carried off the Horizon and out of memory.

Side Plot: The Dragon

Premise: A shrewd lover of beauty accumulates great wealth, only to have it destroyed when his schemes catch up to him.

The Dragon wants treasure. Over the ages, he has accumulated a huge horde in the roots of the Great Tree. In order to enjoy his treasure in peace, he must make sure he is not discovered, and especially not hunted. To this end he kills all of the other dragons that he can find, and has convinced most of the world that dragons do not exist. He encourages a small (but corrupt) group of Fay and Zarth to hunt any dragons that come up from the Pit, and has connections with the several dragon cults that spring up to worship dragons. The dragon cults seek out and protect any dragons that make it out of the depths, and then send them to The Dragon, presumably to "rule at his side". With these factions fighting each other, and neither aware of his location, he remains safe from the vast majority of creatures. He has heard of the last prophesy, but figures that even if the Great Tree falls, the roots (and his hoard) will remain. He is so practiced at manipulating events that he does it literally in his sleep, his enchanted dreams disturbing and directing whole nations. As Ziggy, Hugh, and Zack interfere with his plans he has them destroyed from afar without a thought. Their youngest brother, Oswald, nearly surprises him in his lair, but the Dragon sees Oswald as just another novelty to add to his collection, and exploits his desire for ease and knowledge to assure his friendship. He continues for many years manipulating and guiding events in an attempt to keep the Old Tree from sliding off of the world. It is with genuine surprise that he finds himself confronted, years later, by a livid Oswald who demands that he move his lair to a new location so that the Old Tree can travel to the Horizon as it should. Unable to give up his home and treasures, The Dragon refuses. Guessing that Oswald intends to unveil him to the world, the Dragon gathers all of his huge hoard into the central chamber, intent on protecting it. Instead, Oswald attacks him suddenly, inflicting many fatal wounds. With his last energy, The Dragon destroys his stronghold intent that, if he may not forever enjoy the beauty he has gathered, then neither may anyone else.

Side Plot: Merril

A badly injured woman finds healing through the love, sacrifice, peace, and knowledge of others.

Hugh's love, Zack's sacrifice, Oswald's peace, and Ziggy's knowledge.

Merril has had a hard life. After her mother died slowly from a wasting fungus, she was set adrift by her distant father. Forced to make her own way she worked her way into the employ of Mogan where she was very ill used. After escaping his clutches she turned to the Fay community, but was spurned for her scars and her past. Driven further and further from Fay society, she sought refuge among the Zarth. They accept her, but are stiff and uncomfortable in her presence, distant like her father. On top of this, their ubiquitous metallic technology is poisonous to her Fay life energy. Finally accepting that she may be forever alone and miserable, she embraces her otherness. Shunning the normal and acceptable, she becomes more and more esoteric and perverse. Traveling back to the surface, she passes through cursed territory close to The Dragon's lair. His dreams become lodged in her being, and effused with his purpose she stirs up a mob of Fay to murder Ziggy. She takes his journal, and begins a tormented debate with the document, writing in the margins. From the journals pages she discovers several secret arts, and she ends up on the outskirts of Propitiation, the harried local fortune teller practicing vampyrism on her customers.

Her evil draws Hugh, and he dares her to give him one good reason to stay his hand. Beyond caring, she pours out her life story, but on hearing it Hugh judges her "harmless and too miserable to kill" and leaves her alive, bound to the House of HOZZ, as worse punishment than death. She attempts to torment Oswald, but is thwarted by his tranquility. Later Hugh returns, wracked by grief and a strange new affection. He gives her the Adamant blade that he has forged as a peace offering, and pledges to attempt her redemption. She draws power from him through her vampyric arts, but her evil fuels his powers and he becomes stronger than ever. Cultists of the Dragon visit one day and Merril plans to kill them for the magic artifacts they posess. Hugh (mistaking Merril's evil for that of the cultists) drives them off and then frees her of the house before leaving to hunt them down. Merril is frustrated that her plan was foiled, yet also impressed by Hugh's loyalty. She resumes her study of Ziggy's journal and returns to her old haunts outside of Propitiation, asking her clients for news of the HOZZ brothers. In this manner she learns not only of Hugh's defeat and apparent death in the Turmoil, but of Zack's return from the dead. Driven by her budding love for Hugh, she takes the blade he gave her and confronts his old foe. She is stunned when Zack not only refuses to retaliate, but immediately begins preperations to find Hugh, and help him if he can. Just before he leaves, Zack uses his healing gift to restore Merril, washing away both the Dragon's subtle hold on her, and her deformity (though the scars remain faintly visible).

She waits in Propitiation, working as a spell weaver, until the first of the attacks are rumored. Fleeing the conflict, she travels to her old friends in Zarthaanc but is arrested on sight for a variety of crimes. When asked to name a witness in her defense, she gives them Hugh's name, and the location of his "home" at the house of HOZZ. While awaiting trial she meets several other Fay, and is able to help them cope with their incarceration. To her surprise, Hugh arrives some time later and frees her through trial by combat. They return together to the House of HOZZ and spend several happy years together. Then Hugh is once again summoned to stand before the Zarth court. Fearing that they will harm Merril, he asks her to stay at the House.

After Hugh leaves, Merril grows restless and sets out for the Great Tree. Her demeanor is so changed that no one recognizes her, and they take her for a newly formed Fay, come from the wilds of the Horizon. She takes up residence in the Great Tree and weaves several powerful charms, as well as strengthening those that Ziggy laid (which she learned about from his journal). When the war-band returns from conquering Propitiation it brings news of Zack's death. At the same time, some of the Zarth in the group mention that Zack's brother, Hugh, was also recently executed. Distraught and fearing for Oswald's life, Merril travels back to the House of Hozz and informs him of the recent events. Oswald comforts her and together they set out to uncover the true nature of The Dragon.

When they reach Propitiation, Merril tells Oswald of the Dragon Lance which has been posing as a sculpture along one of the roads. Oswald takes it with him, but Merril decides to stay in Propitiation. She has learned to be at peace. She weaves spells and gives good advice, while circumspectly maintaining the enchanted link between the new and the old Great Tree. Many years later, she is gratified to see the new Great Tree burst into maturity when the old one collapses into the ruin of The Dragon's hoard. Her aid in the founding of Propitiation is recognized and she becomes one of the ad-hoc Royal Fay of the new Great Tree.

Side Plot: The Oracle

Long ago Tanodia communed with the world. He wrote a rune of truth upon the solidcloud, and the solidcloud took on the form of the Oracle. He wandered long over the surface, branded with the runes of the Maker. When he sat still, or stood, he watched the world, and ate and drank and laughed. But when he walked runes of prophecy would sprang up in his footsteps, portending far off events, subtle truths, and terrible secrets. In time, he learned speech, but is silent as he walks.

For many years the Oracle wandered far, but many read his footsteps aslant, and twisted the prophecies to their own ends. As he saw the dire ill which came from these lies he took to resting for long periods. When he walked, he would walk backwards, reading his own steps and coming to rest again to explain the prophecies to those who would listen. Sadly, even the Oracle had no special power to divine the meaning of his steps. His interpretations were better than most, but far too often led others astray. The meaning of the prophetic runes remained clear only in hindsight.

As the ages wore on, the Oracle's steps foretold the fall of each Great Tree as it sprung up. But as the most recent matured, the Nobles of the Tree decided that this would be the last, the final Great Tree, a refuge to endure for all time. They forbade the Oracle to walk, preventing him from issuing any new prophecies. Their servants carried him on a litter, and his every desire was met. Yet he grew ill at ease, and saw that the Great Tree could not endure forever. He too grew wary of his own death, and resolved to sire children before he passed over the Horizon, as is the fate of all living things.

One day, while sitting on his litter in the Fay Court, Llieah's three caretakers brought her to present to the Fay Queen. Smitten by her beauty, Durand forgot his prohibition and ran across the court to catch Llieah in his arms. His steps spelled out the Last Prophecy for all the Fay Court to see, graven in runes into the Great Tree itself. The Nobles are furious at his betrayal, and cut off his legs, breaking the enchantments which hold both Durand and Llieah. Llieah flies with durand far from the Great Tree, and make their home among the deadly Garden of Life where they live together for many years, during which Llieah bears three sons. Soon after the birth of the third, word gets back to the Nobles that the prophecy is close to being fulfilled. They hire the Zarth to kill Durand and Llieah. Durand wakes one morning to find the rune for "fly for your life" seared into the pillow beneath his head. He and Llieah work a potent spell to open a doorway to Llieah's home, and they step through just as the Zarth approach the house. (see Escape)

Finding themselves on Earth, alone with their three small children, Durand and Llieah start their life once again, settling on the outskirts of a city. Llieah bears one more son. Durand is disturbed to find that the doorway never quite closed behind them, and fearful of what may befall his sons. Yet they live in relative peace for many years.

When his boys are full grown, they go rock climbing with their father. Even though he lacks legs, his arms are strong. However, when he reaches the top of the cliff, the HOZZ brothers are astounded to find strange runes engraved in the cliff face where their father had passed. They ask him what they mean, but he refuses to speculate, though these runes tell the four brothers to return to TwinWorld and fulfill their father's legacy. Years pass, and Durand sees his boys grow listless and lacking in direction. Finally Durand sees that he must either doom his children to a pointless existence, or direct them on the path that will lead to a meaningful life. Resigned to fate, Durand directs the boys subtly to the house where they first entered Earth, and where the magic of the doorway still resides.

After his boys leave, he grieves with Llieah for a while, before asking her to return with him to see what has befallen. They arrive to see the Great Tree falling in the distance, fulfilling the Last Prophecy. Durand and Llieah live in the House of HOZZ until Llieah dies of old age. Then Durand too gives up his life and adds his Fay Dust to the power of the Garden of Life. The roots and stems and leaves of the garden take on the power of the oracle, and for an age those who brave its depths may find runes there which tell of marvelous things.

The Prophecy

"Four paths for four brothers, my sons. Twice spoken. Last to first, from doom to doom, oldest to youngest. In rest, in toil, in love, in confusion, the four paths lie. Together you shall come without will, and apart you shall go by choice and not return. One path runs through wood, one through fire, one through water, one through self. You shall slay your foulest friend. You shall heal your bitterest foe. You shall stand against evil and fall to good. You shall yield to truth and bear falsehood. Together your coming shall shake the Great Tree, and your going shall see it fall. Learn well. Choose well. Act well. Endure well."

Explanation

  • Four paths for four brothers, my sons. The prophecy is given by Durand about his four sons, who (at the time of the prophecy) have not yet been born.
  • Twice said, Last to first, from doom to doom, oldest to youngest. This alternating phrase outlines the order (2x the pattern of: 4,1; interlude; 1,4) in which the prophecy is given. That is 4,3,2,1; (interlude about motivation "from doom"); 1,2,3,4; 4,3,2,1; (interlude about effect "to doom"); 1,2,3,4
  • In rest, in toil, in love, in confusion, the four paths lie. 4,3,2,1: Oswald is in rest, Zack in toil, Hugh in love, Ziggy in confusion.
  • Together you shall come without will, and apart you shall go by choice and not return. (interlude about motivation "from doom"): They are diven to Twin World against their will, but as a group. They leave Twin World by their own choice, each choosing his own good death.
  • One path runs through wood, one through fire, one through water, one through self. 1,2,3,4: Ziggy's purpose deals with the Great Tree, Hugh's purpose deals with the Outer Fire, Zack's purpose deals with the Heart of Water, Oswald's purpose deals with his own motivations.
  • You shall slay your foulest friend. You shall heal your bitterest foe. You shall stand against evil and fall to good. You shall yield to truth and bear falsehood. 4,3,2,1: Oswald slays his foul friend (the Dragon), Zack heals his bitter foe (Hugh), Hugh defeats evil (that thing he does) but is killed by good (the Zarth who bring him to justice), Ziggy submits to truth (the prophecy, and the deep knowledge of Twin World) and bears the falsehood (the Dragon levies lies against him).
  • Together your coming shall shake the Great Tree, and your going shall see it fall. (interlude about effect "to doom"): The return of the children of Durand indeed shakes the social order of the Great Tree, and each of them sees the Great Tree fall in some way. Ziggy lays the linking magic which will siphon the life energy from the old Great Tree to the new one. Hugh severs the anchoring roots of the Great Tree, causing it to fall over. Zack sees Propitiation, the symbolic Great Tree, fall to the Zarth and Fay. Oswald sees the Great Tree literally fall into the Turmoil after he slays the dragon.
  • Learn well. Choose well. Act well. Endure well. 1,2,3,4: Ziggy is to learn. Hugh is to choose. Zack is to act. Oswald is to endure.

Misinterpretation of the Prophecy

Each of the Hozz brothers chooses what he likes best from the prophecy, instead of following his own part. Portrayed here in mono-log form.

  • Ziggy: Huh, I like "Twice spoken" People say, "don't make me say it twice" but maybe that's a good thing. I'll say things twice when I want them to really get it. "One path" Huh? Yeah, we've all got to follow the same path. I say we stick together and go to each of these places one at a time. "wood" is first, so we should get to the Great Tree. Also "yield to truth and bear falsehood" makes sense, we shouldn't be afraid to lie when necessary, as long as we admit it afterwords. Also, "learn well" is the first thing, so we should all be trying to learn as much as we can before we choose anything. Gotta follow the prophecy!
  • Hugh: "Together you shall come without will" means that having a weak will is bad. We have to "stand against evil" like it says, and not be intimidated or confused. It even says "in confusion" but that's got to mean we should watch out for confusion. "Through self" means we can't rely on others, we're in this alone. And hey, Merril is probably my "foulest friend", I've jut got to befriend her enough and then, wham! Slaying evil baby!
  • Zack: This is an awesome prophecy, "doom to doom" and "shake the Great Tree"? Totally sweet! "slay your foulest friend" sounds like a trator though, so we've got to watch out for that. It would be easy to get betrayed with all these crazy creatures around. They might not be as friendly as they seem, and like it says we've got to "Choose well" who our friends are.
  • Oswald: Wow, this is a confusing prophecy. I really like how he said "my sons", I've always felt kind of distant from Dad. "Last to first... oldest to youngest" what does that mean? There's "fire... water" in there, maybe it has to do with the four elements? "heal your bitterest foe" sounds good, we should try to reconcile with our enemies instead of hurt them. I like how it says "in love" too. I don't think we should worry too much about it though, if it's a prophecy, it will come true no matter what we do.

Sets of contrasting points and symbols

The main plot arc involves four major groups

  1. The Hozz Brothers are a group everyman. They spend most of their time working against their ultimate goals through pride, malice, misinformation, or laziness.
  2. The Fayrie are a woman symbol society.
  3. The Zarth are a male symbol society.
  4. The Dragon is a symbol of competent evil. He is playing both sides of pretty much everything and keeps coming out on top.
  5. The Oracle is a symbol of uncomfortable truths that keep coming back until you deal with them.

The long-term history has three sections

  1. The Dragon amasses treasure under the Great Tree, and gets most of the world to think that dragons don't exist, while the rest of the world is terrified of dragons, and tries to kill all the other ones (see this story).
  2. The Oracle is established as accurate and reliable, and then prophesies that his offspring will fell/destroy the Great Tree. He is forced to flee as many decide to try and kill him and his family before this prophesy can come true.
  3. The Hozz brothers fulfill the prophesy, but only after misinterpreting it and failing several times.

To Do

Add a plot line for Zabu

We need to make a new character to flesh out the personality space and align with the family reality.

Re-work all character plot lines with personality traits

The existing character arcs should be reworked with the personality trait mapping in mind.